 sqrlcub
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Date: May 6, 2004 @ 1:12 PM
Much better recording quality! It sounds much more confident too! You have some of the sound issues in the beginning where it sounds like there is some line noise, but that goes away quickly. Odd, it isn't there on a repeated listen.
It sounds so much better now that the vast majority of the words are understandable. The whole thing is very musical. The ending ceasura (the pause) that continues into the dying out parts are wonderful. It really sounds like you got into this one a lot more than the first take. It makes it a lot more meaningful sounding when listening. I am really looking forward to more songs by you.
Let's see, what can you do better now? Perhaps adding some depth into the piano and voice like some light reverb to make it sound like you are in a smallish cathedral or a hall with good acoustics (hehehe even a bathroom, they have great acoustics), or something.
There are also some minor tuning problems that you can clean up. I'm not sure how comfortable you are doing punches (ie, inputting the notes you want specifically in problem places) but that isn't real important. If the note is a dartboard, you want to hit the exact center of the bullseye everytime. If you hit it slightly offcenter but still in the bullseye it isn't in perfect tune. That is about where you are in a few of the spots but the rest of it is great. If you do another harmony vocal track over the verses or chorus you will mask those too.
One last note on production, your piano playing is gorgeous but it is kind of in the background more. It could be where you want it, but I would like to hear the volume level a bit closer to the vocals volume. Great job and a 1000% improvement from the last one!
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 Swiviel
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Date: May 7, 2004 @ 10:40 PM
very big improvement..........love the piano... :aplause:
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Swiviel
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Date: May 7, 2004 @ 10:44 PM
how about a  instead of :aplause: lol
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 SoulBeats
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Date: May 8, 2004 @ 8:04 AM
Vocals tend to get too loud and leave the piano on the background, especially when ya go high. Otherwise it sounds better than the older one, but I missed the piano on this version. I understood the lyrics this time. 
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wailingmiserere
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Date: May 9, 2004 @ 12:32 AM
I agree with what everyone else has said... more piano in the mix would be nice, because your playing is lovely and the chords are so gorgeous. I really like your vocals too. You have a very sweet quality to your voice, very pure sounding. There are a few moments here and there where you sound a bit unsure or nervous, but that's no big problem, it's the sort of the thing that will go away the more recording you do.
Very nice, very emotive. I like 
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BedroomSessions
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Date: May 10, 2004 @ 5:40 PM
this one is nice too...i really like your piano playing- its pretty beautiful and relaxing. i guess vocals seems like you are a bit nervous as above, just let your voice out its really sweet
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 sinai
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Date: May 11, 2004 @ 5:05 PM
the piano playing is really good...very atmospheric in parts...the vocals are cool though you reach for some notes that aint there...
solid enough
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greatscottpr...
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Date: May 11, 2004 @ 5:10 PM
  
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Chenobi
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Date: May 12, 2004 @ 11:32 AM
so much emotion! love that!
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cryo-e
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Date: May 14, 2004 @ 1:11 PM
Another  track. Really like it, just hope u re-record your tracks soon 
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 ChaosSurfer
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Date: May 14, 2004 @ 3:57 PM
 It's pretty 
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ronnie71
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Date: May 19, 2004 @ 11:24 AM
so beautiful... i love the piano.. vocals are good.. a little dry needs some reverb, delay or something like that.. great song.. 
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independentm...
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Date: May 23, 2004 @ 9:58 AM
I am almost positive the problem is in the encoding to mp3 format. Send me a note on details of how you recorded this and what programs you used, etc. and I will try to help.
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 Emoceon
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Date: May 23, 2004 @ 4:10 PM
awww...nice...i like the piano...girls that paly piano are hott....lol...such a cutie lol
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rapidhopeloss
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Date: May 29, 2004 @ 11:34 AM
Excellent.
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T-Boi
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Date: May 30, 2004 @ 3:04 PM
This is even better, still pure on vocals, very good note in singing and the piano chords just beautiful. great
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staind1
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Date: June 4, 2004 @ 7:16 PM
it is very lonely and sad, i love it. very beautiful. what i would suggest is that you get either a drum machine or a drum machine software that you can use, this will help flesh out your song and keep it in good time. then what i would do is record just the piano parts with the drum machine, then come back and record your vocals so that you can concentrate on doing one thing at a time. anygood four or 8 track recorder will do, you only need a 4 though, i can tell you how to bounce your tracks and you can add second vocals to fall inbehind some of these if you want, like say on the chorus parts, it's sound really good. You have a very beautiful voice and the piano sounds and chords are also very good. the song is a well written song. and with a little bit of work it'd make an excellant demo for sending out to labels. You have such great potential.
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staind1
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Date: June 4, 2004 @ 7:17 PM
it is very lonely and sad, i love it. very beautiful. what i would suggest is that you get either a drum machine or a drum machine software that you can use, this will help flesh out your song and keep it in good time. then what i would do is record just the piano parts with the drum machine, then come back and record your vocals so that you can concentrate on doing one thing at a time. anygood four or 8 track recorder will do, you only need a 4 though, i can tell you how to bounce your tracks and you can add second vocals to fall inbehind some of these if you want, like say on the chorus parts, it's sound really good. You have a very beautiful voice and the piano sounds and chords are also very good. the song is a well written song. and with a little bit of work it'd make an excellant demo for sending out to labels. You have such great potential.
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ICF
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Date: June 5, 2004 @ 4:44 PM
Yeah i am looking to buy a drum machine or at least find some software for the moment. I think my brother has actually got one so if i can grab that i'll try and work it and maybe get a bit more range. This is still a work in progress and thanks for all the help from everyone!
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Emosideproject
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Date: June 21, 2004 @ 5:22 PM
this is awesome. it reminds me of something corporate! your voice is very very pretty
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cosmicearthgirl
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Date: June 29, 2004 @ 11:34 AM
Another ethereal tune! Vocals sound much more confident on this one, love the high parts!
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 soundsseeker
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Date: June 30, 2004 @ 4:47 PM
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Pagan
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Date: July 28, 2004 @ 12:41 PM
"Im getting a bit tired of chasing you
You’ve got the charm you’ve got the wit
You’ve got the status, got the looks
I know you take it all for granted"
I totally understand that line. story of my life. keep up the good work.
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Lux-Aeterna
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Date: August 21, 2004 @ 4:53 AM
There is grace in the sound of the piano which you play. However, your voice is shining beautifully more than it. Although this melody gave me the sad impression, I love it. This is a wonderful song.
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tsand19151
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Date: August 23, 2004 @ 5:10 PM
.... very nice track. emontional vocals. very well done
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tsand19151
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Date: August 23, 2004 @ 5:11 PM
.... very nice track. emotional vocals. very well done
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MarcSalmon
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Date: August 26, 2004 @ 8:42 AM
awesome. the piano is beautiful. vocals are good too. u have a sweet voice, have a good sense of pitch.
i love those higer notes at the end.
you put such emotion into this piece.
well done
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 Pyro-of-The-...
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Date: August 27, 2004 @ 1:01 PM
I luv the piano on this. The vocals are touching. 
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djfisk
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Date: August 30, 2004 @ 8:16 AM
It's a pity that the production is a bit off (muffled, lo-resolution or whatever) - coz the tune and vocal performance is as godd as any. Good job! Agree that it could be improved by some drums coming in on 2nd verse + reverb. But the material is definately there! Good job!
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Vickxxx
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Date: October 3, 2004 @ 11:30 AM
the melodies are so beautiful and memorable. And your delivery is so emotional, both vocals and piano. You may be experiencing some technical problems recording which you are sorting out, but this performance rises well above it.
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DaveWL
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Date: October 22, 2004 @ 12:57 PM
The songs probably a bit too sad for me to relate to, but understandbly the song is coming from a teenager's point of view. The song is really well constructed and genuinly emotionally performed. A fine artist in development here.
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moam
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Date: November 1, 2004 @ 9:41 PM
You have a BEAUTIFUL voice!  I would recommend getting a better mic or something and it would be PERFECT
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EllyKellner
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Date: April 25, 2005 @ 2:31 PM
I recommend the NTK rode mic. Save up money and get one... Seriously, it will be of good use to you for a long time.
Great melody in the inbetween bits, where you go "You......." nice!
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GTOriginal
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Date: July 22, 2005 @ 9:39 AM
What can I tell you that isn't here a billion times already??? I love this!
Nobody else can speak for me so when I say the singing is sweet and the playing is great, it's my own solitary opinion.  I definately need to spend more time round these parts.  
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